Sweatshop - Used and Abused 16-8

[yucklawyers]

Not read yet, but thanks for the new story!


Edit: Read it now.
Good stuff! Good stuff! Want more! Want more!

Great story, really likes that it had just a touch of the "brought it on herself" to it as well.
My only complaint, too short.

[???]

Very enjoyable! The ending of Pablo felt a little out of place, but overall quite detailed. I enjoyed the note of all the sets in one large warehouse.

[BlueRaven]

The End was a bit rushed, would have hoped to read more of it, but the story is very well written I enjoyed it a lot.

[blondiecath]

I really liked this story. Well written and I could really feel her fear rising. But yes, the ending felt a little rushed. I would have liked to read more about it.

[HistBuff]

But yes, the ending felt a little rushed. I would have liked to read more about it.

That's exactly the problem with those contests. Nothing saddens me more than reading a story and finding it cut short at the end, because the writer was pushed by the deadline and a word limit. It creates an environment where amazing stories get suffocated and end up diminished. When characters are truly breathing with life, even the writer doesn't know what they're going to do next! Or when the story's going to end.

[grovat21]

Nice, but I would have described the various steps of the training