Trust over Nothing - Kristen's Board Contest

[Vela Nanashi]

Interesting but a bit disagreeable to be spoken to like that, also I am not a fan of frames, where a character in the future tells of the events in the past, but I suppose that in this case let's us know she is still alive and that might be good in this case. I had to pull myself out of the protagonist, so I skimmed the surface, this is really not a story for me. I think it is well written for what it is and what genre it is, but it is not for me.

[Vile8r]

Knowing the intensity of some of your past work, I was intrigued to see how you would handle a "consensual" story. You did well, @SoftGameHunter , while still managing to utilize some "nastiness"!

[Claire]

This doesn't work for me as part of a consensual contest. To me, the spirit of the contest is to challenge ourselves to let go of the usual transgressive angle of our writing. This feels like finding a loophole to me to avoid doing that.

I did enjoy the unhinged, pretentious voice of the narrator though.

[SoftGameHunter]

This doesn't work for me as part of a consensual contest. To me, the spirit of the contest is to challenge ourselves to let go of the usual transgressive angle of our writing. This feels like finding a loophole to me to avoid doing that.

I did enjoy the unhinged, pretentious voice of the narrator though.

After reading the other stories, I'm inclined to agree it doesn't fit with the rest. My take on consensual was very literal. If we do this prompt again some day, I'll keep this in mind.

[Colin Piper]

This is well written, but to me it starts in the wrong place - the ending doesn't tie back to the beginning in any meaningful way. What is all the performance art stuff for, other than to set up the protagonist's motivation for seeking out danger? It could all be done by starting at "That was when I realized I had to go all out." and perhaps throwing in a couple of sentences of backstory at the appropriate point.

That said, the beginning was promising. Did you maybe have something else in mind originally? But well done all the same.