Record Chaser - Final Chapter Released!

[Vela Nanashi]

part 10:

It is actually interesting to me that Claire has chosen to trust Mark on his word he will let her go and not keep her for longer after this. Interesting choice for him to make there, too. Also scary moment there for Claire not knowing for sure what side he would really fall on. Then again he seems like a crazy person with rules that matter to him, so it would not be part of his record if he came after the time period, and he might see it as breaking his self imposed strict rules, also it had stopped being fun long ago, being just self torture, as I am not sure he really cares about Claire enough to want to torture her for real. I like that moment of anger in her when he tries to help her, it feels very real to me. Also being so worn out like she is I can kind of get, I know that level of exhaustion and pain, but not for the same reasons.

Also getting dressed when balance is out of whack and you are almost hallucinating from exhaustion and pain yeah... not fun.

Ouch at that very depressed line about if there was a source of light in her life. I am sure the path back will be rough, but I am choosing to believe she can do it, she seems to be strong enough for it at least.

Yeah walking alone even during day can be scary, as you know most people don't care, they will if you get into trouble think someone else will help, bystander effect, while at night there may be just you and whomever wants to hurt you.

Oh he does care about her, make sure she gets home safe, even in a selfish way it would make sense actually, say someone killed her, with his dna in her, he would be prime suspect, though I am not sure how much dna cum has when it is not containing any sperm. But I am sure with how much they had sex there will be skin and other stuff there.

Claire made Mark think, I am not sure how rare that is for one of his victims. Of course I am not sure what will come of any of that.

Yeah... those kinds of silly things would enter ones mind, maybe he likes almond scent, I can't use that again and such, it is sad when one let's someone else change a part of what one likes. Getting into that dinosaur print shirt for comfort it is clinging on to existence just cause she loves it. I also totally get that anxiety/paranoia about locking the door. Reminds me of a two sentence horror, something like "I went to check the door was locked and it was. But are you sure you were the one to lock it?" Sometimes one has to make a few passes to check all spaces a person could be in to feel safe inside...

Also all the text messages and her thoughts and the messages typed out and not sent... ouch, hits me in the feels, but I also see a little of the dark humor there, not sure if intended or not, but yeah...

I am sure that she should get a lot of slack after her rape if she tells anyone about that, but it is a very hard thing to tell others about.

Good that Jason will be there for her at least.

I hope she does not let what Mark did ruin things she loves for real, that is honestly my main worry with her. I think the Pi and CreamPie thing probably does not work in most languages just English.

I also like that unlike a lot of rape stories, you deal with this aftermath, treating it as the serious thing it is, I think you really got that down, of course it is sadly just the beginning, but I still have hope that Claire will get through it.

[Claire]

I appreciate all the nice comments! I'll answer in detail tomorrow.

[Claire]

I finished writing the last chapter, I will post it soon. What a journey... But let's get to your comments first.

@SoftGameHunter You wrote so much, you'll get your own post after this one. But thank you so much for giving me your detailed impressions as you read along. Means a lot.

Regarding the whole "Is 13 orgasms in 24 hours realistic?" debate: I really don't want to tell men about their orgasms. But from what I read and from what our new AI friends told me, going for 13 times in one is rare and difficult, but not so over the top that you are entering science fiction or fantasy territory. Here is what Grok had to say when I asked:

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For a healthy 30-year-old man in good physical condition with normal testosterone levels and no sexual dysfunction, the realistic upper limit for orgasms (with ejaculation) in a 24-hour period is usually cited in medical and sexological literature as **7–10 times**, though a small percentage of men can go higher under ideal conditions.

Here’s what the data and clinical experience show:

- Most studies and surveys (e.g., Kinsey Institute data, later replicated in smaller studies) find the extreme recorded range for young adult men is **8–12 orgasms with ejaculation in 24 hours**, but these are outliers who deliberately pushed the limit (often in controlled or semi-controlled settings).
- The more common “very high but still realistic” number for a fit 30-year-old who is highly motivated, well-hydrated, gets some sleep, eats lightly, and uses techniques to shorten refractory period is **6–9 times** in 24 hours.
- After about the 5th–6th ejaculation, volume drops dramatically and many men experience 1–2 hour refractory periods even if they’re young and healthy. Prostate and seminal vesicle replenishment becomes the limiting factor more than erection ability.
- A few men (probably <5 % of the population) with exceptionally short natural refractory periods and high libido can reach **10–12** in 24 hours, but they usually only once or twice in their lives under perfect conditions (vacation, no work, lots of stimulation, possibly mild sleep deprivation).

Factors that help reach the higher end:
- Age 18–35 (peak refractory period shortness)
- Excellent cardiovascular fitness
- Good hydration and light diet
- Short naps between sessions
- Variety of stimulation (to avoid penile overstimulation soreness)
- Possibly moderate caffeine or other mild stimulants (anecdotal)

Factors that lower the number:
- Dehydration, alcohol, heavy meals, lack of sleep, stress
- Repeated penile-only stimulation without breaks (leads to soreness)
- Trying to force ejaculation when seminal vesicles are empty (can cause discomfort)

So, realistically:
- Average healthy 30-year-old: 4–6 times comfortably
- Highly motivated and optimized: 7–9 times
- Absolute physiological ceiling for almost all men: ~10–12, with only rare exceptions pushing 15+ (those cases are essentially medical anecdotes)

Beyond ~8–10, most men report it stops being pleasurable and starts feeling like “work,” even if they can still physically ejaculate.

ChatGPT gives a similar answer. So, I would say Mark's depiction in the story is slightly embellished for the dramatic purpose that he is actively chasing a record and willing to forego any kind of pleasure that usually comes with an orgasm.

Oops, I’m sorry. I was sure I had read somewhere 'the end' And I had thought you had left it deliberately open — so that each reader could imagine for themselves what might happen next.

Of course, I’m happy if another chapter comes. Although, in a way, I also liked this ending. For me, the story felt complete — in my mind, Claire was the 'winner' — and given how strong she has been so far, I imagined that she would be able to move past it all pretty well.

I'm still curious to read your detailed thoughts on this chapter, especially if you thought that it was the last one!

[Claire]

@SoftGameHunter You have a very different reading of the text compared to me and I like it. It's fun to see for me how your perspective differs from mine.

Chapter 6

I was very happy to read your appreciation for chapter 6. Chapter 5 was tough to follow for meat the time and I was very happy about how it turned out. But because it features no extended rape scene I knew from the start that it wouldn't get much attention.


Chapter 8

Personally, I'm still very happy with how chapter 8 turned out but I see where you are coming from. I think the only thing I would disagree with is that it features less dialogue. I think what you're picking up on in the writing is not so much the time gap between chapters 7 and 8. The biggest change I've undergone as a writer was probably between chapters 5 and 6. Chapters 7 to 9 were difficult to write for me because I knew that no rape could achieve the same emotional intensity again that the first one had with its four chapters of buildup. And I wanted each rape to depict a different emotional beat. Originally, I had planned another chapter that depicted the shower rape that the story references in later chapters but I ended up cutting it out of the story because I couldn't find any purpose for it in the narrative. And I don't like to write sex/rape for the purpose of just depicting sex/rape. I thought that for chapter 8, I had come up with a nice idea turning the spanking section into an endurance game and having the kiss that Claire resisted for so long be the stakes that they fought over. But it might very well be that he fundamental problem of the story caught up to me and I was not fully able to inject enough narrative tension into the scene.


Chapter 9

No need to be sorry for finding a chaper hot. Honestly, the most fascinating thing about human sexuality is probably that you could depict whatever and there would at least be one person out there somewhere who gets off on it. You can see how you seemed to love it and @JTCK not so much I would say. So whatever floats your boat!


Chapter 10

Glad you liked it!


edit: I forgot to say. Feel free to use the record chasing concept for one of your stories! For me, this is just a tool to gve the story structure and a sense of progression. But if you want to put in the center of the story, especially with a different kind of rapist (one who doesn't view taking viagra, drugs, using lube and whatever as cheating like Mark does) you could go crazy with this.

[Claire]

It is actually interesting to me that Claire has chosen to trust Mark on his word he will let her go and not keep her for longer after this. Interesting choice for him to make there, too.

It was established early on that he doesn't lie to her. And in chapter 6, she already put that to the test when she asked him to keep his word and charge her phone for her like he promised in chapter 1.

I like that moment of anger in her when he tries to help her, it feels very real to me. Also being so worn out like she is I can kind of get, I know that level of exhaustion and pain, but not for the same reasons.

I'm sorry that you can recognize yourself in her in that moment. *hug*

Ouch at that very depressed line about if there was a source of light in her life. I am sure the path back will be rough, but I am choosing to believe she can do it, she seems to be strong enough for it at least.

I hope that, too. Claire deserves a happy ending.

Claire made Mark think, I am not sure how rare that is for one of his victims. Of course I am not sure what will come of any of that.

Other victims have triggered his guilt before (the opening of chapter 7 deals a lot with that). But he never spent this much time with one of his victims and was never so... unmasked as he has been here.

Yeah... those kinds of silly things would enter ones mind, maybe he likes almond scent, I can't use that again and such, it is sad when one let's someone else change a part of what one likes. Getting into that dinosaur print shirt for comfort it is clinging on to existence just cause she loves it. I also totally get that anxiety/paranoia about locking the door. Reminds me of a two sentence horror, something like "I went to check the door was locked and it was. But are you sure you were the one to lock it?" Sometimes one has to make a few passes to check all spaces a person could be in to feel safe inside...

From my understanding, all of these things are common trauma symptoms. I wanted to depict the aftermath in a more realistic way than just her taking a shower and curling into a fetal position. Those things happen, yes, but we reduce the victims response often to this stereotype and use that to quickly say "Look! Trauma!"

Also all the text messages and her thoughts and the messages typed out and not sent... ouch, hits me in the feels, but I also see a little of the dark humor there, not sure if intended or not, but yeah...

I agree, there is something darkly humorous about these unsent messages. But it's not Claire making jokes. She's just not having the filter people usually have in that moment that would prevent her from writing such a message.

I think the Pi and CreamPie thing probably does not work in most languages just English.

Probably not. It's another example for how trauma triggers are associative, not causal or logical. I felt bit cruel when I ruined even that cute plushie for her... How is Pi pronounced in Swedish?

I also like that unlike a lot of rape stories, you deal with this aftermath, treating it as the serious thing it is, I think you really got that down, of course it is sadly just the beginning, but I still have hope that Claire will get through it.

Yeah, me too. Some part of me still wants to write that romantic, cheesy, cutesy Claire X Eugene spinoff to cleanse my soul from the filth I have poured over this poor girl over the course of a year...



Thank you, Vela! Loved your live ticker style commentary as always!

[SoftGameHunter]

@Claire I'm glad you liked my feedback. I really enjoyed engaging with this one. There are some stories I love but there's not much to say beyond super-duper. This one, though, really tickled on many levels, both erotic and geekrotic. From my rapid reading of other comments, it looks like there is some variation in how people responded to the ideas presented here, and I know I differed from the majority is some of them. To me, that just makes it more interesting. I've been deep diving for a couple years now into fiction writing (by watching lots of youtubers, so you know I'm getting only the best) and if there's one thing almost everyone agrees on, it's that even the best of the best of the best works out there will have its detractors and nothing ever written will be seen the same by all or even most readers. There's a whole school of thought that says even the author's clear and explicit intent is irrelevant in how readers interpret their words. (It's called the Death of the Author after the original essay that originated it. Easily googled for those interested.)

I hadn't thought about revisiting this one myself. But I wonder if I could. I wouldn't try to re-write it or anything, but I wonder about a fictional story of someone who reads it and decides to try it himself. Extra drama if he's not even close to systematic or careful. How would he plan. How would he pick the girl to honor? What if he's never even raped anyone? There are a lot of options here.

[Claire]

I've been deep diving for a couple years now into fiction writing (by watching lots of youtubers, so you know I'm getting only the best) and if there's one thing almost everyone agrees on, it's that even the best of the best of the best works out there will have its detractors and nothing ever written will be seen the same by all or even most readers. There's a whole school of thought that says even the author's clear and explicit intent is irrelevant in how readers interpret their words. (It's called the Death of the Author after the original essay that originated it. Easily googled for those interested.)

I'm familiar with the Death of the Author concept. I never read the original essay, and I'm not sure whether I would go so far that I agree wih the idea that authorial intent is complettely irrelevant. But if someone takes something out of a story I wrote that I didn't intent at all, I love to hear about it. But, if somebody is curious about what my intent was and ask about it, I'm interested in that, too.

What youtubers on fiction writing do you watch? I watched quite a bit from "Hello Future Me" and - this one is not about writing but more about movies but I think is also interesting for story telling in general - "Lessons From the Screenplay".

[SoftGameHunter]

Oh, I'm not fully onboard with Death of the Author, and I never read the original essay either. But I'm also not fully onboard with The Curtains are Fucking Blue either (a complementary opposite approach, for anyone interested, that readers read far too much into subtext and the plain meaning is usually the correct one.)

I've seen some Hello Future Me. As for others, let's see. (Scrambles to YouTube subscriptions listing.) The Cozy Creative is good and honest. Bookfox has solid stuff. Nonsense-Free Kristin is not entirely nonsense-free but has some engaging material. Writer Brandon McNulty is a good engaging guy that keeps it direct and on-point and not too long. I recently found JBat and he's got lots of ideas on fantasy stuff (and my wife loves his hair). Jed Herne is good for sci-fi stuff. Bookborn is another solid sci-fi and fantasy. I've come across Writing with Andrew who is definitely an academic but still keeps it real. Tale Foundry is a great one for philosophical ideas in story telling. Writing with Jenna Moreci has a ton of stuff and if you can get past her snarky moralizing, she knows a lot (and rumor has it she ignores most of it in her own books, but I can't comment on that.) The absolute queen of trope discussions is found in Overly Sarcastic Productions. Abbie Emmons has good basics, but when she teams up with her sister they tend to drone on endlessly.

Even going through my subscriptions I think I overlooked a bunch, and others are not on my subscriptions. But this isn't a bad starting list for interested readers.


Edit: I don't want to derail Record Chaser, so I've started a thread on YouTube writing resources:
Writing Advice Videos on YouTube

[Vela Nanashi]

I hate when people read into what I wrote things that are not there, and then go get triggered and upset at me as if I wrote those things, and meant to hurt them. Thus I hate the very idea of death of the author, fuck that, I am strongly on the curtains are fucking blue side.

However I do not mind if people find things in the story I did not mean to put there that they enjoy and find value in, that is different, but if they try to tell me I feel or think or meant something I did not feel, think or mean they can fuck off.

I feel it is a failure of modern readers that they can't actually read what is written, and they skim for trigger words rather than actually read what is written, or even have to find a reading guide for a book to know what they are meant to feel about it in today's society, rather than what the writer intended.

For a calmer take that goes into some of the aspects see here (if it is too long for you skip to when she starts talking about critical literacy):


Anyway, not really related to Record Chaser so let me know if I should move this post somewhere. Also I should make something clear too, when I comment I very rarely mean to fire any shots at the author, I read the story, and I experience emotions and thoughts about the story tainted for certain by my own personal experiences and I comment on the story itself, the characters within, so if I say something mean about a character it is the character I am reacting to not the author, just to clarify the difference.

So I would not mind someone hating a character I wrote, for their thoughts and actions, that is perfectly fine, many of my characters are not pure good people, and hating them is perfectly fine, maybe even intended on some level. Also we all know we are not condoning or suggesting the events in our stories here be done in real life or are good, but some readers will still think so even if we say it clearly at the top, besides maybe they don't even bother reading in a linear way, from start till end.

At any rate rant over

[SoftGameHunter]

To be clear, I don't think Death of the Author suggests saying anything about the author based on what's in the work. It specifically removes the author as a final authority on what a piece of writing means in favor of a more fluid interpretation. Record Chaser is a good candidate for this kind of discussion because it clearly does exactly that. Claire, the author, is right here among us and more than willing to discuss her exact thought process. But even knowing that, when I read the chapters so far I got a completely different take on some aspects of it. Claire clearly enjoys writing in a way that invites ambiguity (at least I hope she does because it works out that way) so this is a perfect example in favor of the Death of the Author view. My reasons for why I love this piece might differ completely from other readers' (as evidenced by the commentary) or from Claire herself. I'd say we all benefited from this, but it could go the other way.

The problem is people who think Death of the Author is a suitably literal metaphor for handling works they don't like, particularly when they assign their own interpretation to what the author meant instead of what they as readers inferred. And FWIW, this is one reason I didn't include Second Story in my list of recommended channels (which is now on a separate thread in the Book Club page). She has some valid insights, but I find her viciously judgemental about authors she doesn't favor (and slightly despicable.)