The Infinite Rape

[peterfrisk]

Congratulations for reaching the status of “popular story”. A badge of honor here…

The story is hot and a bit different but in an interesting way.

Peter! Always nice to get a comment from you, thank you! Also, I saw that you hadn't reached 50 reputation points despite commenting here regularly. So I took it upon myself to change that.

Thank you… You are too kind. An honor I was not really aiming for but now that it happened and I’m part of it I feel that I belong here. I just hope your mission to get me in wasn’t too hard and that I at least had double digits before you got started

[Claire]

@peterfrisk It wasn't. You should have gotten notifications for the ratings I gave you. I think it were something like 5 points I gave you, I think? You should have had them anyway. I just rated a couple of your feedback posts on other stories that the author hadn't read and I would have done it sooner if I had seen them earlier.

An honor I was not really aiming for but now that it happened and I’m part of it I feel that I belong here.

Of course you belong here! I'm really sorry if it didn't feel like that before. Everybody who articulates their views on what they read in a respectful manner is welcome here in my book. Nobody needs to be a professional author or literature critic to participate in a way that's meaningful. I think it's a common misconception that you need some special qualification to leave a nice comment that's appreciated by the author or the community at large. I'm glad you're here, supporting our authors! It's much appreciated. And if you ever decide to write a story yourself, I'll check it out, I promise!

[Mia]

I like the story, especially the fact that she seems completely passive. It always resonates with
I also really liked the fat men part. The screen, though - not my thing.
What I would change: I would provide at least a bit of context (even though I’m aware that the lack of it is the storie’s key feature; but I love a good build-up, it has almost as much of a psychological impact on me as acts themselves). I would maybe extend the descriptions (especially in terms of male sensations, reactions, etc)


[Claire]

I like the story, especially the fact that she seems completely passive. It always resonates with
I also really liked the fat men part.

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We talked about this in chat before, but let me reiterate what I said there.

I would provide at least a bit of context (even though I’m aware that the lack of it is the storie’s key feature; but I love a good build-up, it has almost as much of a psychological impact on me as acts themselves).

I fully agree with you, I usually prefer that much more to. As you noted, this story was a deliberate attempt not to do that. Adding context would turn this story into something else entirely

I would maybe extend the descriptions (especially in terms of male sensations, reactions, etc)

I wanted to cycle through a bunch of men very quickly and stay strictly rooted in her detached pov. But if you want to read a short story that focuses heavily on male sensations, check out You. It's a similarly quick read, but the total opposite of Infinite Rape in almost every way.

Thanks for the feedback!

[Claire]

After I gained some more experience translating Late Satisfaction I revisited this story, the first one I translated from German to English. The opening post now contains the new version. But the old version is also still available in a spoiler below the new text.

If you read this story before and liked it, but haven't rated it yet, I'd appreciate it if you rated it now. The number of Yes-votes in the poll suggests there are quite a few people who enjoyed this who haven't rated the story yet.

[Lucius]

The text has become colder, more streamlined. Undoubtedly that was the author's intention. An example below.

She had learned to recognize when a man was about to come.

used to be

She had gotten good at recognizing when a man was about to come inside of her.

[Claire]

@Lucius I wouldn't say that making the text colder was my intention, but sharpening it a bit and trusting the reader a little more. For example, I removed the "inside of her" in the sentence you cited because I think that it was clear from context that the text is talking about coming inside her. That didn't need to be spelled out again.

I think especially early on in my writing I had a tendency to specify which body was doing what instead of leaving that to the imagination of the reader or trusting their ability to infer that from context. So you might encounter a lot of "Her right hand was doing this while her left did this." The original German version of Infinite Rape I wrote in a few hours one night in November 2024. So I was still pretty new to writing stories. I had a little more than one month of writing experience at the time.

I will probably go through all of my older stories and give them that same treatment. Next on my agenda is polishing An Unfortunate Misstep. I can't fix the weak structure and bland characters of that story, but I can at least elevate the prose a little.

[sinfulwords]

Oooo I really like this story. I was first drawn in by the awesome title “The Infinite Rape.” It simply captures the attention! And the meat of the story didn’t disappoint. I like how u made something as ghastly as a gang-rape seem almost mundane. It was how the leading lady seemed so casual about the whole thing. Like how she would describe the genitalia violating her with such banality—almost like she was differentiating between tools in her tool box it gave the story a morbid varnish for me because the concept of someone being so used and abused to the point of indifference is pure wickedness so of course I loved it! Kudos! Great read!

[Claire]

@sinfulwords Thank you! Mundane and banal are usually not what I think of when I try to describe the language used to describe the gang rape here, but now that I think about it, I think it works. I'd call the language clinical, but mundane is a good one. I like that take.

I'm glad you liked it!