One Morning in Potaissa - Gang Rape Galore

[Lucius]

I'm afraid so. But don't let me stop you. I get the impression I'm in the minority in that regard.

Besides, if a particular chapter is clearly labeled as such, I can just skip over that one and still enjoy the rest of the story.

Tagging everything the right way is very important indeed.

I should clarify. I agree with @Claire--many things that make me squeamish are worth it when integrated well into a good story. (Though it probably would put a damper on my immediate erotic enjoyment of the material.) I too read and watched Outlander, and all sorts of horrible things happen there that didn't prevent me from enjoying the overall story.

But , for example, if he had whipped her "there", or given her three dozen lashes before raping her, I probably would have bailed.

It's good to know my balancing different aspects of Ziptia's ordeal worked here. Nevertheless I'm pretty certain her bum doesn't agree with my assessment...

[AdmiralPiet]

This reminds me. When I saw some snippets of teh show Spartacus I was very perplexed by the style in which they spoke.
Apparently the writers modified the english so the structure would resemble latin more.

Quite, I suppose they were inspired by Lewis Grassic Gibbon who had done it in the 1930s... Gibbon was better at it too. I just made Proculus and Priscus speak properly and gave Rectus a bit more freedom as a provincial rising from the ranks. As for the Illyrian cavalrymen, they would struggle with Virgil, although they would be at home with Catullus 16.

Oh, wow!
Did not expect an answer to this half a year later.

Did also not know that another writer had done this before.
From the snippets I saw oft the show I had always had the feeling that this was rather clever. But if the writers got it from somewhere else, that explains it...

[Lucius]

Oh, wow!
Did not expect an answer to this half a year later.

Not exactly, it's just I've noticed that I messed up the hyperlink back in June and edited the post.

Did also not know that another writer had done this before.
From the snippets I saw oft the show I had always had the feeling that this was rather clever. But if the writers got it from somewhere else, that explains it...

I'm watching the spin-off Ashur series, and in my opinion they go over the top with 'Englatin'. Their gladiatorship is not Roman but Romantasian too, but that's how it ever was.

[AdmiralPiet]

Not exactly, it's just I've noticed that I messed up the hyperlink back in June and edited the post.

Oh...
So I fucked up by never replying

I'm watching the spin-off Ashur series, and in my opinion they go over the top with 'Englatin'. Their gladiatorship is not Roman but Romantasian too, but that's how it ever was.

I would argue the only things historically accurate in those shows are the names of some people and places.

[Lucius]

Not exactly, it's just I've noticed that I messed up the hyperlink back in June and edited the post.

Oh...
So I fucked up by never replying

I'm watching the spin-off Ashur series, and in my opinion they go over the top with 'Englatin'. Their gladiatorship is not Roman but Romantasian too, but that's how it ever was.

I would argue the only things historically accurate in those shows are the names of some people and places.

:D Pretty much so regarding the people and places. Then again, all they have to do is to commit four Cs --'Capua', 'Crassus', 'Caesar' and 'Cornelia' -- to memory.

[HistBuff]

Tempus illud in lucem rursus proferendi est!

I gather this was for a contest with a set word limit, so this was a very fine reason to make the whole story about one female prisoner for a Roman-camp gang-rape. There was a very good balance between details and story flow. Ala was the word that showed me this was cavalry, and I love reading a story where the decurion is a cavalry officer in command of a turma or at least a patrol, as he should be

The ending was both satisfying and inevitable, and I was happy to be reminded of who succeeded to Hadrian and when. Gladiatorial games were at there peak then, and yes, there had been female gladiatrices since at least Nero's time.

I often joke with my wife saying I was once a centurion under Hadrian and lived in Syria with a wife from Crete. Black hair and pale olive skin; it must be there or before I took up this taste. One thing I really like about historical settings is the fact women usually had cunt hair!

[Lucius]

Tempus illud in lucem rursus proferendi est!

Fiat!

I often joke with my wife saying I was once a centurion under Hadrian and lived in Syria with a wife from Crete. Black hair and pale olive skin; it must be there or before I took up this taste. One thing I really like about historical settings is the fact women usually had cunt hair!

Yeah, I happen to like the combination as well. As for cunt hair -- I think the current consensus, such as it is, is that in the cities of the Roman Empire the 'bare down there' fashion prevailed among prostitutes (all those pubic lice...) and sometimes spilled over into the higher strata of society. Oh yes, and Jewesses did depilate for religious reasons.

[Writers_Bloque]

I am going to get this done. Historical pieces are a hit or miss with me, more of a miss if its just fucking in a past timeframe. But this.....

It is a monster of a story, hiding behind the wool of a ram. I liked it, though man on man rape is a little off for me, but that is my personal thing, and no way influences how I take in a good story such as this.

The ancient times, before Pax Romana and even after were wild as all fuck. I think you did more to accent this than most authors who try. I felt the scene, feeling the times right to my core. Torture and rape are real iffy with me, but you did it with as much flair as one would get from a news report. (not that it was a bad thing.) I like how you hid the bitter parts with details to make the bitter pill easier to swallow.

I think you, like Claire and the others have a real shot at becoming published authors. I really do.

8/10 my personal bias: I could have used a little more humiliation, as it would have been more historically accurate than just beat down and fuck. Good work!

[Lucius]

@Writers_Bloque Thank you for the comment!

As for further humiliation -- it was possible, I guess, but no soldier wanted to lose a chance to fuck her before the trial. Anything else would've gone down before the (almost) certain execution. That said, I suppose Ziptia did find her being sodomized in front of hundreds of soldiers pretty humiliating.

[HistBuff]

Kudos for becoming an accomplished author!