The Infinite Rape

[Mrsnathpall]

This is only the second story I've read on RA and really only the second story I've read all the way through on any of the forced fantasy sites I've previously visited, so it's hard to compare with other tales. The story as it stands is fine, again I don't have a lot to which I can compare. It's my opinion that a reviewer should comment on what is in the text rather than what the reviewer wanted to be included. However, I think my pleasure would have been increased if I knew more about the victim, who is she, why and maybe how, she was selected, and who were the perpetrators.

One reviewer commented that more description on what was appearing on the jumbo screen would have added more excitement in reading the story, I agree. Also, who are the men? Are these men the same as we all meet on a daily basis: our friends, co-workers, relatives who are participating in their wildest fantasy coming true? Are these men people who we would never suspect of thinking of being a part of such a veil act; let alone actually doing the deed? Are anyone of these men a person who I'll meet today and will be thinking of putting me on a mattress and of me being defiled by a group of men as he watches and lusting for his turn to get between my legs. Scary.

[Claire]

This is only the second story I've read on RA and really only the second story I've read all the way through on any of the forced fantasy sites I've previously visited, so it's hard to compare with other tales. The story as it stands is fine, again I don't have a lot to which I can compare. It's my opinion that a reviewer should comment on what is in the text rather than what the reviewer wanted to be included. However, I think my pleasure would have been increased if I knew more about the victim, who is she, why and maybe how, she was selected, and who were the perpetrators.

One reviewer commented that more description on what was appearing on the jumbo screen would have added more excitement in reading the story, I agree. Also, who are the men? Are these men the same as we all meet on a daily basis: our friends, co-workers, relatives who are participating in their wildest fantasy coming true? Are these men people who we would never suspect of thinking of being a part of such a veil act; let alone actually doing the deed? Are anyone of these men a person who I'll meet today and will be thinking of putting me on a mattress and of me being defiled by a group of men as he watches and lusting for his turn to get between my legs. Scary.

Thank you for your feedback, much appreciated.

I get why you are asking these questions but if the story were to answer them, then this would ruin the story. The truth is, this isn't even a story in a traditional sense. It's just a sequence of events described very monotonously with clinical language that reads more like a biology textbook than typical erotic fiction. There is no progression in the events depicted, no inciting incident that kickstarts the story, no rise in tension that is ultimately released in a cathartic climax. It's just relentness numbness to horrific events that just keep going and going and going with nothing ever changing. That is the point. It is meant to convey the mental state the victim is in: total resignation. Who she was before this? Irrelevant. Why she was picked? Irrelevant. Why are these men are doing this? Irrelevant. It simply doesn't matter anymore. Answering these questions in the story would defeat the point.

So what you have here is a story that has no character development, no plot progression in a tradtional sense, no tension, no central narrative question to answer. It uses deliberately unerotic language. And yet, people get off on this. Its rating is extremely high for a short story with no contest support, 8 people voted they came, the German original was extremely popular back on RavishU and the story is also extremely popular on AO3 where I also posted it. And that's the interesting part. People get off on something that is designed to be unerotic and that defies all common wisdom when it comes to storytelling.

So, this is essentially a very exprimental story that seems to touch a nerve with some people but certainly not all. But I fully agree with you that it is definitely not for everyone with its lack of traditional storytelling. But if you're looking for something that's more typical for my usual writing style, give It's okay, I feel a little lonely, too. a look. That is much more representative for what I usually write and is much more enjoyable if you're looking for fleshed out characters and a story with stakes and a sense of progression.

But to tease you a little: The story drops a subtle hint that the men doing this belong to a men's rights activist group called Men at War.

And if you like a story, consider giving it a rating. You can rate stories with 1 to 3 points, depending on how much you liked them. Rating the stories you read helps the site a lot!

[Mrsnathpall]

Thank you, Claire , for your reply and explanation of the story structure.

I don't know how to give ratings. I clicked here and there and could not figure out the method.

Let me know how to apply a rating and I'll be happy to do so in the future.

[Vela Nanashi]

@Mrsnathpall
Next to the numbers at top and bottom of posts should be a thumbs up icon, pressing that will show a popup where you can select a rating level from 1 to 3 (you can upgrade later) and a comment box (that you can leave empty) and then a rate button to place the rating. The redder upper number rates the story (as does the first post's rating), while the more blue number rates the specific post. I hope that helps, and yeah I should try to make that easier I know.

[LaLia]

I read this a while back and forgot to comment + rate it. The rape that never ends is a really good idea that was well executed here. I'm imagining it's a group of criminals like the mafia punishing someone for unwittingly defying them, but you probably had a different idea when writing it.

The idea is actually that these are the Men at War people at work. There is a small hint at that in the text but it's not obvious.

So, I've now read the story in the English version as well. I didn't find the reference to Men at War either. Could you please quote the hint?

[Claire]

@LaLia It's the man named Jimmy who is asked to participate but declines the offer. He is the main character in Men at War. In Men at War he too barely paticipated and spent more time directing the others. The name drop is a small nod that somebody who remembers the name from Men at War might recognize.

[SoftGameHunter]

Unerotic? Well, that's the rub right there, isn't it? This entire genre is based on sexual expression that at least one character finds highly unerotic. And a lot of rape stories are specifically focused on how non-aroused the victim is. Granted, a lot have her cumming too, but for a lot of readers, the less sexy the victim feels, the better the story.

And one way to degrade and make her feel unsexy is to be clinical. To be rote, mechanical, brutal in efficiency of time and effort. Like, she's not even worth getting excited over. So, in-universe, having her treated like a cold slab of fuck meat is, for us readers, part of the fun. And the language can reflect that if it's done well. The story was written in a detached way, but it didn't feel like just a report. It felt like the author channeling that woman's broken degradation and defeat into words. And it worked.

And so did the premise. Gang rape has a critical mass effect. Get enough rapists together, and they can go for seconds. Get still more, and they can go for thirds. Eventually you get a critical mass and they can just go indefinitely if they so choose.

For me, the only turn-off was a guy cleaning the spunk the way he did. Normally I'd stop reading mid-sentence and click the back button. But it was short and I was enjoying the overall story, so I just moved past it.

Oh, and I think the clicking I'm about to do should push this one from public to popular, so congrats.

[peterfrisk]

Congratulations for reaching the status of “popular story”. A badge of honor here…

The story is hot and a bit different but in an interesting way.

[Claire]

Congratulations for reaching the status of “popular story”. A badge of honor here…

The story is hot and a bit different but in an interesting way.

Peter! Always nice to get a comment from you, thank you! Also, I saw that you hadn't reached 50 reputation points despite commenting here regularly. So I took it upon myself to change that.

[Claire]

Unerotic? Well, that's the rub right there, isn't it? This entire genre is based on sexual expression that at least one character finds highly unerotic. And a lot of rape stories are specifically focused on how non-aroused the victim is. Granted, a lot have her cumming too, but for a lot of readers, the less sexy the victim feels, the better the story.

And one way to degrade and make her feel unsexy is to be clinical. To be rote, mechanical, brutal in efficiency of time and effort. Like, she's not even worth getting excited over. So, in-universe, having her treated like a cold slab of fuck meat is, for us readers, part of the fun. And the language can reflect that if it's done well. The story was written in a detached way, but it didn't feel like just a report. It felt like the author channeling that woman's broken degradation and defeat into words. And it worked.

I agree with you. But I still think that most stories even if they describe completely unaroused victims getting raped use language that you would consider erotic. And they treat the rapist's orgasm as, well, a climax.

Thank you for the praise and pushing this one through the finish line.