A Rommates Control

[DayDreamNights]

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The author of this story has read and accepted the rules for posting stories. They guarantee that the following story depicts none of the themes listed in the Forbidden Content section of the rules.

The following story is a work of fiction meant for entertainment purposes only. It depicts nonconsensual sexual acts between adults. It is in no way meant to be understood as an endorsement of nonconsensual sex in real life. Any similarities of the characters in the story to real people are purely coincidental.
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Title: A Roommates Control
Author: DayDreamNights
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My first story inspired by a fantasy I've had over the years
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Title of the Story

It was early in the morning, the sun just cresting over the horizon. My roommate and best friend had left for work about fifteen minutes ago and now I stood over his bed watching his fiance sleep soundlessly. I knew underneath her blanket she wore nothing but an oversized t-shirt, probably one of his.

She’s this cute native gal, short but had a plump ass and a decent c cup rack. A nice, warm tight cunt. I’d fucked her once, I was awkward and dorky after but in the moment I knew she enjoyed it. It started with a text and a secret, turned out my bud was a cuck who liked watching and listening to his gal get fucked. And they figured, since we’d moved in together, we’d try it out. It was nice, fun, but she became wishy washy on doing it again. She got testy, snippy, and overall a total cunt who controlled everything in the house while sitting on her ass while me and her man paid all the bills. My cocks hard just remembering that night. I look down at my phone and read the text from my roommate.

She’s all yours

I smile a twisted smile. What I’m about to do would traumatize her, I knew this, I processed this, but in this moment I didn’t care of any of that. He agreed with me that her back and forth agreement on it was annoying, he couldn’t understand it when she said she loved it and wanted me raw next time.

He suggested I go in raw.

I slip my boxers off, my six inch cock throbbing in anticipation. She would know immediately, I was much larger than her fiance by both their admissions. I’d not seen his but I took them both on their word, not truly interested in him sexually. I slide under her covers and wrap my one arm around her, pulling her in close. She mumbles something in her sleep and wraps her arms around me, her fiances name escapes her lips and I can’t help but smile.

I kiss her forehead and start groping her chest, I rub her cunt and thigh with my thigh and listen as she starts to moan. Soft, whimpering moans. “..so…early…” she whispers sleepily between moans.

“Just relax and enjoy, I want you to feel good before I work.” I whisper softly, doing my best to mimic my friends voice. I wasn’t ready for her to know what I was about to do to her just yet.

Her breaths escape in ragged gasp as I begin to kiss her, she moans freely and often. We stay like this for what felt like hours but was perhaps maybe minutes. My cock throbbing every more with every escaped gasp between our lips.

Then I heard it, exactly what I was waiting to hear. She pulled back and between gasps she begged “..babe….p..please, fuck me.…” the desperation In her voice clear I pulled up her shirt and felt her soaking wet cunt. She was ready.

I move her onto her back and get on top of her, lowering my weight onto her slowly I start to push my cock into her soft throbbing cunt. She sucks me in and starts wrapping her legs around me with soft moans as I get half my cock into her, deeper than I know her man could ever go.

Her eyes shoot open in surprise and she screams and tries to buck me off, pounding on my chest with her fists screaming my name and begging me to stop. I cover her mouth with my free hand and hold her down, her flailing doing little more than fucking herself on my cock. Tears fill her eyes as I pull out and push myself deeper into her begging little cunt. I bury all sick inches of my cock into her soft little cunt, her muffled screams making my cock throb, I sit in her like that and wait until she goes limps, until her muffled screams turn to whimpers.

Tears streamed down the side of her face as I sit there my cock filling her throbbing sucking cunt. Her face screamed at me to let her go and pull out but her desperate little cunt begged me to stay, it begged for my cock.

And I was all too pleased to oblige it.

When she went limp I let my hand go from her mouth. I wanted to hear what would come next as I grabbed her hips with my hands, she asked my why I was doing this, that he'd find out and kill me, that she'd never forget this and go to the cops.
I showed her my texts with her man and his go ahead as I began to fuck her like a wild fucking animal. I thrust into her hard and fast each time I slammed myself to my base and split her cunt open, thinking of every insult she hurled at me, every passive aggressive remark, every time I thought she crossed me and delighted myself in taking her body for my own. She bit her lip as I leaned over her for better purchase and pounded into her. She was unable to resist gasping and moaning and still she whispered begging me to stop.

Each time she did I filled her to my shaft and held it there. I held her down by her neck as the minutes floated by in a timeless daze of ecstasy. Her begging and crying only filled me with a twisted desire. I was close, but I wasn’t ready to be done with her yet.
I pulled out and dragged by limp body to the edge of her bed. She didn’t even bother trying to fight me anymore and a part of me was disappointed. If only she knew what I had planned. I thought to myself. She’d be taking this opportunity to stop me now. I’d assumed she’d disassociated by this point hoping for her man to walk in, and maybe he would.

When I get her to the edge of the bed I flip her over and lift her ass in the air. I hold her down by the neck and all too late I see her eyes bulge and her legs begin to kick as I line my cock up to her ass.

“PLEASE!” She screams “we’ve never done that, please…please….” She cried.

I lean over her ear and growl “I promise I’ll be quick” and shove all six inches of my cock into her ass. She cries and pleads with me to stop but all she succeeds in is making me harder. I lose track of time savouring her cries of pain before I feel my cock throb and finish in her ass.

I pull out, cum dripping from her stretched out. She was drenched in sweat and sobbed to herself. She didn’t move, didn’t try and hide herself or pull herself in for comfort, simply laid there crying.

I turned to leave and saw my friend standing there at the door, his bag hanging from his hand mouth agape. I walk past him, my soft cock dangling and dripping in his partners juices. “She’s all yours” I whisper, patting his shoulder as I pass and close the door behind me.

Cries and no’s echo through the apartment as I put my earbuds in and launch into a new game.

End of story
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This is my first story I'd really appreciate to hear what you all think about it <3

[Claire]

I think this is a great first attempt. I think you made a smart choice starting with something short!

I think I liked the most that it took her a while to notice that he wasn't her fiance. You could have drawn that out even longer I think, maybe even have him try not revealing who he really is for as long as he could, turn that into a bit of a sadistic game for him. I think that would have been a nice dynamic for the story.

[Claire]

I'm doing something I usually wouldn't do. I'm pushing this story back to the top.

We have a first time author here posting a really short story (~1250 words) that can be read in minutes. And after almost 3 days, it got feedback from only a single person. How do we expect to build an active community here when we treat people who take the step to put their writing and sexual fantasies out there for the first time like this? I remember being nervous when I posted the first chapter of my first story on RavishU. Those of us who have now posted god knows how many stories might think it's not a big deal. But putting any kind of erotic writing, let alone rape fantasy, out there for the first time, that's a big deal!

Does anybody really expect for @DayDreamNights to stick around, post more stories and comment on other authors' stories if we treat his(?) very first story with indifference? I would like him to feel motivated to write more and would hope that receiving some welcoming feedback would motivate him to leave feedback for other authors himself. We desperately need some fresh blood in this community, not just the same 5 to 10 authors who have now been around for forever posting their own stuff occasionally commenting on the other veterans' stories in a circle jerk.

If you truly wonder why all our predecessor communities are gone now: The reason is what you see in this thread here. If we don't welcome the rare new author who takes the plunge to put himself out there, then I don't know how anybody expects this community to last.

So for the love of god people: I'm not saying to praise this story to high heaven even if it's not your thing. But what's so hard about spending the five minutes it takes to read this short story and leave a few encouraging words and maybe a suggestion for improvement for a first time author?

@DayDreamNights I'm sorry that this is the reception you got for your first story. When I created this forum, the intent was always for this exact thing to no longer happen. A community that collectively ignores new members who actually try to participate destroys itself. I would hope that you give this another chance with a second story some time and treat the stories you read here not like yours has been treated. We need new people who post stories and leave comments on other people stories so much.


@RapeU, @SoftGameHunter, @Vela Nanashi, @JTCK, @Blue

[RapeU]

Sometimes the little details are good. Showing her the text messages that her fiancé agreed to do it was a neat little detail, but the timing of it was wrong. In this case, you have him already inside her. Realistically, you're not going to reach for your phone and open up text messages while you have your cock inside a woman. This detail could have come later, like after the rapist squirts into her you then show the text messages.

The scenario didn't particularly interest me because cuck just isn't one of my kinks. But, there is lack of cuck stories on the forum so you have helped fill in a gap within our library. I do hope you try writing again.

[Vela Nanashi]

sick inches --> six inches

Would be better if you wrote the dialog out.

dragged by limp body --> her limp body?

streched out --> ass/anus?

Not really a story for me, but for a first story I think you did good, please write more stories, I can tell you have good ideas and that is really the biggest part of the battle for writing a good story, and well I think this story is too short and could maybe use a continuation from fiance's point of view and maybe some more descriptions, at least I like those.

Also anal creampie has some interesting effects hormonally, but is not as exciting to me as vaginal creampie, but I guess fiance takes care of that in the background.

[JTCK]

The setting of the story isn’t completely my thing either; I prefer it when the victims know (and fear) what’s coming for them. But the story is very well written and quite hot.

I’d love to read more from you — and longer stories as well.

I liked this line the most, it’s really good:

I cover her mouth with my free hand and hold her down, her flailing doing little more than fucking herself on my cock.

Thank you for posting the story!

[SoftGameHunter]

I didn't really think of this as a cuckold story. Maybe that's a definition thing, but when the man volunteers his woman's body to a buddy, I think in terms of other words than cuckold. I just looked it up, and Wikepedia gives wittold as an alternative. But it's an alternative I've certainly never heard of, so it wouldn't be that helpful. I just enjoyed seeing dudes trading off their women without asking her first.

TBH, I was turned off by the grammar and overall format a bit. I think I'm not alone in this. The story themes themselves are fine. Crying girl. Satisfied rapist. What's not to love? So if it's your first story (ever?), that just gives you a great big target to aim upward from here.

[DayDreamNights]

Thank you everyone for the replies and thank you claire for calling it to attention

I appreciate everyones feedback and am dutifully working on another story to share.

I'm not scared off by the lack of response as I suspected little coming into this and I believe the only way for us to grow is for us to keep improving.

I'll be honest any pacing/grammar issues are my own fault for not proofreading and writing while more than a little high.

My next story will be better formatted and clearer in the grammar.

[SoftGameHunter]

Well, not to dispute Claire too much, but everyone has lives, and weekdays aren't always the liveliest times on a small board. Can't wait to see what you produce sober!